tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post1653434472405522840..comments2023-12-03T21:00:07.148-06:00Comments on Beachanny By The Sea: DianaBeachannyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-31392007346015643752011-04-07T14:45:10.318-05:002011-04-07T14:45:10.318-05:00This piece feels dense with craftswomanship, Gay; ...This piece feels dense with craftswomanship, Gay; I enjoy your dedication to meter and rhyme-scheme. Is this a particular form? I notice the abab quatrains with the refrain to end on making the last a quintain. The technical diligence enhances the content, as it should be with good form poetry; 'smote' perhaps the only end-rhyme that made me stumble a little. <br /><br />Fine piece and touching dedication.<br /><br />Warmest Salad<br /><br />Luke xLuke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-83353822155815305742011-03-30T15:46:30.904-05:002011-03-30T15:46:30.904-05:00Beautiful image of a friend that obviously meant a...Beautiful image of a friend that obviously meant a great deal to you. I know several other posters have mentioned the lines about walking in the grove of oaks, but I have to say it is one of those lines that says so much more than the words that make it up. Fantastic read, great submission. Hope all is well & take care,<br /><br />crb.Caribbean Foolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16211032750843178534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-74313238526660399962011-03-30T12:40:01.480-05:002011-03-30T12:40:01.480-05:00She walked in those groves of oaks, and she hunted...She walked in those groves of oaks, and she hunted. Love the repetitive lines, love the poem.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-27206398959100039672011-03-30T12:29:14.647-05:002011-03-30T12:29:14.647-05:00Her looks alone made some feel smote.
She feared e...Her looks alone made some feel smote.<br />She feared excess would bring a blight.<br /><br />An excellent rondel, and a perfect form for a tribute to a woman made goddess. For me the two lines I'm quoting hinted at Diana in the flesh: would a goddess 'feel' and fear'?<br /><br />All in all, for me, a deeply satisfying poem. Thank you, Gay!Alegria Imperialhttp://jornales.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-21646598147611795172011-03-30T11:03:12.295-05:002011-03-30T11:03:12.295-05:00What a touching tribute to Diana. May we all see ...What a touching tribute to Diana. May we all see the gods and goddesses that walk amongst us.Belindahttp://thehalfwaypoint.net/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-25591833100846569922011-03-30T09:56:56.030-05:002011-03-30T09:56:56.030-05:00A beautiful tribute:
“She walked in sacred groves...A beautiful tribute:<br /><br />“She walked in sacred groves of oaks, <br />An earthly goddess of the night. <br />Both calm and wise she would alight,<br />And there she charmed the woodland folks.” <br /><br />this stanza says it for me…a peaceful walk amidst the oaks…a beautiful, calm, wise, charming woman who was obviously in touch with life. <br /><br />Well done, my friend.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-15611976325851547462011-03-30T08:49:24.098-05:002011-03-30T08:49:24.098-05:00Gay,
You make a Rondel look easy! I loved the touc...Gay,<br />You make a Rondel look easy! I loved the touching tribute. Your poem flowed so beautifully. I also liked the nice photo in the beginning. It went perfect with the poem. Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.Corbiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08168756186612658336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-31594662479802737112011-03-30T07:32:58.261-05:002011-03-30T07:32:58.261-05:00A lovely tribute, Gay...and a lovely rondel.
I ha...A lovely tribute, Gay...and a lovely rondel.<br /><br />I have little exposure to rondels, but your writing here, in this form, strokes my interest.<br /><br />I will attempt one, or two, but they are classical.<br /><br />Beautiful, and she sounds like a beautiful woman...strong.Asobimehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15661326504398833746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-9964807389530049052011-03-30T04:10:46.041-05:002011-03-30T04:10:46.041-05:00Nothing lives long
Only the earth and the mountain...Nothing lives long<br />Only the earth and the mountains<br /><br />White Antelope, “Death Song of the Cheyenne” (1864)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-69826937095539172882011-03-29T22:48:03.320-05:002011-03-29T22:48:03.320-05:00Thank you everyone who wrote here today and all of...Thank you everyone who wrote here today and all of you for being my friend. It was hard on two fronts this week. I wanted to write a new poem for today and had several suggestions in addition to some ideas that have been banging around for months. Somehow those never get finished or if they do don't arrive as expected. I know I'd have had a wonderful time in New York; I wouldn't have wanted to leave. I never like to leave anywhere I am. At my age, you'd think I know why but wherever I am is where I want to be. That's a little crazy..but I love those major cities!! Good on us and good on the panel for presenting it to us and good on us for having such fabulous people supporting us every week. It is a true blessing.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-19392752197777724562011-03-29T22:36:51.306-05:002011-03-29T22:36:51.306-05:00A beautiful, moving tribute Gay, perfect in form a...A beautiful, moving tribute Gay, perfect in form and pleasing to eye and to ear...but I am sorry to hear of your friend, and your loss. It is never an easy thing...never.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-57960569838044401542011-03-29T21:22:51.643-05:002011-03-29T21:22:51.643-05:00I love the name Diana - at beautiful tribute to yo...I love the name Diana - at beautiful tribute to your friend...and so happy that One Stop Poetry won...together you all challenge us to do our best and become better writers...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-62081313478015313582011-03-29T21:16:17.678-05:002011-03-29T21:16:17.678-05:00((gay)) you made the right decision in being there...((gay)) you made the right decision in being there...and this is a gorgeous tribute to her...we are blessed to have you in the fold...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-90936295284111513962011-03-29T20:30:28.138-05:002011-03-29T20:30:28.138-05:00How could I not love this. She feels real, very b...How could I not love this. She feels real, very beautifully written.Diana Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11333180217795290780noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-77355670152759677442011-03-29T19:22:26.139-05:002011-03-29T19:22:26.139-05:00Love this style.Love this style.Monkey Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06741294113777908130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-26512890020988530402011-03-29T19:16:43.059-05:002011-03-29T19:16:43.059-05:00Diana has always been one of my favorite Goddess&#...Diana has always been one of my favorite Goddess'. Well captured!Luna Ravenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00577750498136765025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-15361998862111796592011-03-29T17:39:15.200-05:002011-03-29T17:39:15.200-05:00Technically perfect Rondel, and quite enchanting i...Technically perfect Rondel, and quite enchanting in its imagery and language. With Rondels I always feel the urge to put the B refrain on the end after the final repetition of the A refrain (thus making it a Rondel Prime, or "French Sonnet", as it has 14 lines), though I can see here it makes sense not to. Well chosen refrains and end-rhymes are the key, aren't they? Nicely done Gay, I like. I wonder how this would look sans caps at beginning of line, though? The old form and classical theme/old-fashioned language perhaps suggest use of caps but I almost always find they impede transition from line to line a little (especially if you have run-ons).<br /><br />Lovely.Luke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-45591020719418555332011-03-29T17:16:22.378-05:002011-03-29T17:16:22.378-05:00This is magical. I can imagine the scene and I lov...This is magical. I can imagine the scene and I love these lines: <br />"She needed neither spell nor hoax<br />Her soul deflected any slight;"<br />Thank you for share your tribute.<br />Blessings. SorayaSorayahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09849410324663079558noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-51968245982748673192011-03-29T16:28:51.003-05:002011-03-29T16:28:51.003-05:00great tribute, Gay... love the mythical feel, &...great tribute, Gay... love the mythical feel, & flow. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03359959975341890512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-29899502859640795112011-03-29T14:43:41.920-05:002011-03-29T14:43:41.920-05:00she must have been a very special person gay - won...she must have been a very special person gay - wonderful tribute - and yes - i so love your rondel - i just get wrapped in the words because your flow is so steady and confident (if you know what i mean) i feel the safety of someone who knows a lot about life and love and connecting to people. so good to know you gayClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-13449500440079297702011-03-29T11:36:24.255-05:002011-03-29T11:36:24.255-05:00Gay, this is just stunning! What a wonderful tribu...Gay, this is just stunning! What a wonderful tribute to the legacy of one who was obviously very respected and much loved by you. Your imagery is mythical, much like the muse, and the form is perfection (In my humble opinion) An absolutely wonderful write, and brilliant when read aloud :)Tashtoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15847190224960829574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-77616284633684217432011-03-29T11:13:22.975-05:002011-03-29T11:13:22.975-05:00The word 'smote' niggled me - surely the v...The word 'smote' niggled me - surely the verb is 'to smite (something)' ? <br />But I love the picture conjured up by the lines:-<br />"She walked in sacred groves of oaks<br />An earthly goddess of the night."Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-5818748182680531802011-03-29T07:08:22.121-05:002011-03-29T07:08:22.121-05:00there is a softness to this although I feel rondel...there is a softness to this although I feel rondels can<br />become quite harsh...the contemplative nature allows<br />me to see beyond the rhyme, very fine ~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-59418664158621474962011-03-29T03:00:47.643-05:002011-03-29T03:00:47.643-05:00And now someone I never knew seems real within my ...And now someone I never knew seems real within my experience of your writing, which is to me one of the best reasons for writing a poem - and to manage it via such a tricky structure - bravo!Michele Brenton aka banana_the_poethttp://poems-2-share.blog.co.uknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-27165172609531864292011-03-29T01:17:54.094-05:002011-03-29T01:17:54.094-05:00Flawless Gay... just wonderful !
JL&BFlawless Gay... just wonderful !<br />JL&BJL Dodgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12713220952100680871noreply@blogger.com