tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post3453749367180877061..comments2023-12-03T21:00:07.148-06:00Comments on Beachanny By The Sea: Surreal Night OutBeachannyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-6463053244482937422011-05-19T04:00:02.987-05:002011-05-19T04:00:02.987-05:00your writing is always enchanting,
love it.
check...your writing is always enchanting,<br />love it.<br /><br />check out bluebell short story slam and make a contribution today.<br /><br />you rock.Bluebell Books Twitter Clubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02346482636849975765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-34243258252420979652011-05-17T08:14:58.601-05:002011-05-17T08:14:58.601-05:00This is brilliant...so enjoyed it. You capture the...This is brilliant...so enjoyed it. You capture the 'unrealness' so well...wonderful imagery!Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18216734722467789412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-37187036659986666392011-05-11T17:59:27.227-05:002011-05-11T17:59:27.227-05:00Hope he didn't leave your arm in formaldehyde,...Hope he didn't leave your arm in formaldehyde, or if he did, you at least demanded a few $million in exchange for its use.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-44079582227773364152011-05-09T15:56:22.138-05:002011-05-09T15:56:22.138-05:00this is a gorgeous piece gay...i love the rather s...this is a gorgeous piece gay...i love the rather surreal imagery and a delightful pace you set throughout...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-23997312119421634162011-05-06T10:19:04.855-05:002011-05-06T10:19:04.855-05:00To the dream, it all makes perfect sense. That'...To the dream, it all makes perfect sense. That's why the narrative blank verse form works so well. The reportage is florid enough, the journey so weird as to require no embellishment. - BrendanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-85881339205247373292011-05-05T07:59:24.905-05:002011-05-05T07:59:24.905-05:00Pentameters seem a fairly natural speech rhythm an...Pentameters seem a fairly natural speech rhythm and this reads beautifully.<br />I find it difficult to escape "the tyranny of the iambic pentameter." <br />If I.P's were good enough for Shakespeare . . etc . . .!Doctor FTSEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10052101566471519778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-49828346688662163412011-05-03T15:31:29.018-05:002011-05-03T15:31:29.018-05:00Nice one Gay, very rhythmic even if you don't ...Nice one Gay, very rhythmic even if you don't pay attention to the iambic undertones. There's a true surreal quality to writing surreally about surrealism, and putting your own head in the TV to do it. Some great lines, too--"..A swimming pool arrived quite late." Hard to top that. ;_)hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-23199012872000861862011-05-02T22:03:18.500-05:002011-05-02T22:03:18.500-05:00So that's how it's done. Very trippy in a ...So that's how it's done. Very trippy in a imabic kind of way. Great read and lessonHenry Clemmonshttp://henryclemmonspoet.blogspot.com/2011/05/benjamin-mcgee-try-this-form-again.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-76277081928643025082011-05-02T20:39:13.723-05:002011-05-02T20:39:13.723-05:00Kind of a surreal post... with a glimpse of an And...Kind of a surreal post... with a glimpse of an Andy Warhol twist thrown in. I like the iambic pentameter part of this form, yet it seems a bit more difficult than it would seem.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-62813114203297066982011-05-02T16:28:47.337-05:002011-05-02T16:28:47.337-05:00great job, anny. love the conversational tone and...great job, anny. love the conversational tone and diction you've written in. very robert frost like, and I'm ever a fan of his. . .yours too :)<br /><br />Monty / bummyMontyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17446385166445251013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-83080255310961237032011-05-02T14:15:12.585-05:002011-05-02T14:15:12.585-05:00Wonderfully weird and outstandingly surreal..very ...Wonderfully weird and outstandingly surreal..very enjoyable :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-33016732822653766192011-05-02T12:29:37.571-05:002011-05-02T12:29:37.571-05:00You carried me willingly through the whole poem, t...You carried me willingly through the whole poem, then I laughed at the swimming pool part.<br /><br />Excellent! :DAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15515148975353849650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-55733327792941598572011-05-02T11:59:20.519-05:002011-05-02T11:59:20.519-05:00What a wonderfully surreal mindscape, all deliciou...What a wonderfully surreal mindscape, all deliciously expressed in faultless blank verse!Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-35553105676579571462011-05-02T11:15:58.073-05:002011-05-02T11:15:58.073-05:00That must have been some party!That must have been some party!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-41312169871417888922011-05-02T10:22:49.170-05:002011-05-02T10:22:49.170-05:00Brilliant. I'm glad I missed that party, I wo...Brilliant. I'm glad I missed that party, I would have got a migraine I'm sure.<br />I don't think blank verse is at all easy. I seem to think in couplets, badly rhyming couplets usually.Pennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11084508068938703918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-68490238856607920822011-05-02T09:53:33.524-05:002011-05-02T09:53:33.524-05:00Yesterday, youth looked to a distant future
when A...Yesterday, youth looked to a distant future<br />when Andy Warhol would be popular<br />a pleasure to the hungry yearning masses<br />And so he was with every Brother BigJohn (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-69560604172288263292011-05-02T09:12:41.627-05:002011-05-02T09:12:41.627-05:00Sounded like a great party to be at Gay, Andy warh...Sounded like a great party to be at Gay, Andy warhol and Damian hirst? Fantastic! Iambic that doesn't rhyme is more than difficult to write when you've been writing sonnets and triolets for a few months but I'm determined to give it a go ;) Great write hun!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-85289785839331204332011-05-02T07:18:24.362-05:002011-05-02T07:18:24.362-05:00I loved my journey stepping into this piece Gay .....I loved my journey stepping into this piece Gay .. <br />of 'floating' people and balloons..<br />and Andy Warhol .. beautiful surreal ..<br />*smiled* throughout ..<br />but that last line Gay .. where you couldn't stay despite the allure of 'Hockneys swimming pool' inviting a 'bigger splash' and had to take your leave .. 'going out on a limb' :) .. <br />'Damian Hirst had taken my arm to leave'<br />So, so brilliant and brilliantly clever ~ <br />what a finishing line!! ~ Lib ~ @Libithinalibithinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02804271915695515140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-44637716178539271552011-05-02T06:53:54.766-05:002011-05-02T06:53:54.766-05:00A wonderful descriptive reality twist! An exciting...A wonderful descriptive reality twist! An exciting experience to read! Loved the Andy Warhol glimpse!Gemma Wisemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.com