tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post5428054147769837481..comments2023-12-03T21:00:07.148-06:00Comments on Beachanny By The Sea: Ghazal of the BellsBeachannyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comBlogger46125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-4065521724323765132019-05-26T17:19:22.005-05:002019-05-26T17:19:22.005-05:00Gorgeously romantic, though redolent with loss.Gorgeously romantic, though redolent with loss.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-83383142570954349262019-05-25T05:51:25.575-05:002019-05-25T05:51:25.575-05:00The word bells is so evocative, and it's as th...The word bells is so evocative, and it's as though you can hear them vibrating through this. I like the journeys--each one separate in its couplet, but all linked. "Gay-ribboned twilight" was a nice touch.Merril D. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07208799388236948565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-43913756213831685902019-05-24T16:18:03.109-05:002019-05-24T16:18:03.109-05:00The song of the bells certainly resounds throughou...The song of the bells certainly resounds throughout this ghazal, especially in its many rhymes and repetitions. There are different journeys taking place here, all very well aligned to the simply complex nature of this theme.<br />It's so good to read and enjoy your penmanship again. :-)Anmol (HA)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02427056865589377093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-83799410163746140962019-05-24T15:12:19.240-05:002019-05-24T15:12:19.240-05:00I really love the way you describe the journey in ...I really love the way you describe the journey in your Ghazal and how it end with a switch from fell to bells ... brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-61110913430607178022019-05-24T13:02:09.905-05:002019-05-24T13:02:09.905-05:00I like the movement from bells to bells, with all ...I like the movement from bells to bells, with all their different associations. It makes it a true journey, a true exploration of the theme. sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01756314170839177900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-13659986448084295712019-05-24T03:47:36.797-05:002019-05-24T03:47:36.797-05:00Weaving a narrative in a ghazal format is not easy...Weaving a narrative in a ghazal format is not easy. This comes close to another musical form - the songs that a boatman sings. This form is quite popular in Bengali culture. Hats off to your talent!Reena Saxenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15179224041268392976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-41749618047831022612019-05-24T02:18:52.463-05:002019-05-24T02:18:52.463-05:00This is stunningly beautiful Gay! After reading yo...This is stunningly beautiful Gay! After reading your words here I realize I was lazy with the form today. I did not explore it for its possibilities. You mined it for the deep treasures of the heart, and brought forth the motherload! robkistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08166835029205143266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-8609312114314388162012-04-12T14:11:02.051-05:002012-04-12T14:11:02.051-05:00Gay, this is heart breaking! I am just so taken w...Gay, this is heart breaking! I am just so taken with your talent and abilities. Oh god, it makes me clutch my heart, these words.<br /><br />They are obviously from a deep place in your heart, never to be shunted aside.<br />They express great and enduring love, as I know you have.<br /><br />Absolutely beautiful, but so heartbreaking. I can't write more because of my tears.<br /><br />Lady NyoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-5669875909611798832012-04-12T10:00:38.105-05:002012-04-12T10:00:38.105-05:00It's a piece that speaks to more than mere tra...It's a piece that speaks to more than mere travels of the physical, but goodness does it set the wanderlust in me something fierce. Sitting here in a cubicle reading this, I want nothing more than to get out and see the world--though I know most these places I shall never witness. Beautiful, Gay!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-32629339526007944722012-04-11T21:10:54.305-05:002012-04-11T21:10:54.305-05:00This really wonderful. Charming to read as we foll...This really wonderful. Charming to read as we follow the journey of the bells and the way of love running its magical cycle. You've captured so much wonder and awe in this that I am pulled into its beauty with amazement. You've crafted this with such subtle power and awareness that I only feel the presence of today as a shadow that falls on your world of the imagination. An excellent write.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-84031920643459593702012-04-11T13:29:07.078-05:002012-04-11T13:29:07.078-05:00Your words made my heart rings with sadness, and j...Your words made my heart rings with sadness, and joy. This is achingly beautiful. I wasn't familiar with the form, but if this is what Ghazal is, I love it.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-17978344313990792562012-04-11T10:20:25.268-05:002012-04-11T10:20:25.268-05:00Ghazal can be a real challenge. You've shown h...Ghazal can be a real challenge. You've shown how it should be done! Astoundingly beautiful, Gay!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-76787090112047681682012-04-11T09:19:59.083-05:002012-04-11T09:19:59.083-05:00sigh....this left me speechless. So SO good...the ...sigh....this left me speechless. So SO good...the repetition rising and falling like a wave. Just so much interlinks here- a melenacholy verse thats for sure...this soaked me in twilight....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-64217311077639634782012-04-11T04:27:04.706-05:002012-04-11T04:27:04.706-05:00Sensuous adaptation of the formSensuous adaptation of the formJohn (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-69209084608839913182012-04-11T04:19:37.722-05:002012-04-11T04:19:37.722-05:00I enjoyed this but somehow it almost made me cry.I enjoyed this but somehow it almost made me cry.Lisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02399300464457820101noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-68173087067578761892012-04-11T03:19:41.847-05:002012-04-11T03:19:41.847-05:00This ghazal's a bittersweet ode to blossoms an...This ghazal's a bittersweet ode to blossoms and twilight, that voyage from I to Thou that never quite reaches its shore or, far more difficult, has but can't or won't any more. Church bells,sea bells, monastery chimes, sea-surge rhymes, all tolling in remembrance for what sustains even as it falls. Very nice work, Gay. - BrendanBrendanhttp://blueoran.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-87288760701151014882012-04-11T02:21:22.652-05:002012-04-11T02:21:22.652-05:00The couplet form and your language are so beautifu...The couplet form and your language are so beautiful and musical. This work looks effortless, but we know better. Simply, lovely Gay!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-22920578996182511912012-04-11T02:07:47.077-05:002012-04-11T02:07:47.077-05:00I love the feeling and rhythm in this poem Gay. Yo...I love the feeling and rhythm in this poem Gay. You can feel the resonance of the bells and their significance to each character as you read....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-24323952156682955862012-04-10T22:29:46.928-05:002012-04-10T22:29:46.928-05:00I know that quote (which seems to be universal tha...I know that quote (which seems to be universal that in peace time cannons are melted to make bells, in war-time the reverse. But somehow couldn't quite make that fit the unrequited love theme; and gay didn't seem to waltz in here at all - ha. I'll keep thinking about it (I knew it was a classical requirement.) Of course, there were lots of I's just not any of my names..Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-77149300881492527432012-04-10T22:24:23.277-05:002012-04-10T22:24:23.277-05:00Fabulous! I love ghazals, with their second-line r...Fabulous! I love ghazals, with their second-line repetition, and the final couplet, and this, even in its modernity, is tone perfect. I couldn't help thinking that in the classical ghazal, you end with a line that is self-referential, that even names the poet, and that you could have - without an inkling of embarrassment - put in a reference to a "cannon". Only half-kidding! - this is a beautiful poem.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-52714679558595872312012-04-10T22:06:35.958-05:002012-04-10T22:06:35.958-05:00I remember the form lesson on ghazals, and attempt...I remember the form lesson on ghazals, and attempting one...and how difficult I found it. This is musical, beautiful... I love the third and last couplets.wayside word gardenhttp://waysidewordgarden.wordpress.com/2012/04/10/the-turning/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-64552514103591670492012-04-10T21:29:53.478-05:002012-04-10T21:29:53.478-05:00Ghazaliscous gay! such a strong form - pushes the ...Ghazaliscous gay! such a strong form - pushes the motion of the ocean to a total tidal emotion... crikey i ve just stopped by Pats that guy is infectious - strong write gay - a joy to read :)Arron Shillinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17989854352644796752noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-24652312634856093492012-04-10T21:17:35.530-05:002012-04-10T21:17:35.530-05:00ENjoyed the journey this one took me....ENjoyed the journey this one took me....Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17957913294364310380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-3350985828424180492012-04-10T21:02:31.121-05:002012-04-10T21:02:31.121-05:00the poem has a heaviness to them, at least to me, ...the poem has a heaviness to them, at least to me, because when I think of bells, i think of heavy metal objects...and then the repetition also adds "weight"<br /><br />i admire u for using this form. i don't know how to use it at all<br /><br /><a href="http://zongrik.wordpress.com/2011/07/09/messy-little-girl/" rel="nofollow">messy little girl</a>zongrikhttp://zongrik.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-37134421252666498722012-04-10T19:17:26.663-05:002012-04-10T19:17:26.663-05:00Beautiful poem!Beautiful poem!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com