tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post7296964077528798809..comments2023-12-03T21:00:07.148-06:00Comments on Beachanny By The Sea: Ardent WishesBeachannyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-85467648938320116982011-12-16T07:34:24.986-06:002011-12-16T07:34:24.986-06:00Just beautiful, Gay!Just beautiful, Gay!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-77496657989138632011-12-11T16:19:13.660-06:002011-12-11T16:19:13.660-06:00would that I could ...
Ahh I so adored, I don'...would that I could ...<br />Ahh I so adored, I don't think I took a single breath Gay from start of read to finish ~<br />would that I could .. I would .. and shower you with all ~ hugs Liblibithinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02804271915695515140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-34395164637664201042011-12-03T20:06:01.339-06:002011-12-03T20:06:01.339-06:00A great play of the requirements. Simile, metaphor...A great play of the requirements. Simile, metaphor, alliterations and others are very much present. You've certainly had taken time and efforts.Beautiful poem!<br /><br />Hank <br />P/S I've taken the liberty of extending my posting below to your helpful comments at my blog.<br /><br />Beachanny Ma'am,<br />How nice of you to take the trouble for a serious view of the relationship to the d'Verse prompt. You're absolutely right!<br />It was written specifically for 3WW. I later linked it to d'Verse for want of a posting immediately at hand. I didn't make any changes that was why. Thanks for the tip!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-3503586385778478502011-12-03T15:47:22.457-06:002011-12-03T15:47:22.457-06:00So much beauty and fancy in this Gay.
I like the ...So much beauty and fancy in this Gay.<br /><br />I like the trip beyond the moon! And the feathered vane, of course. <br /><br />xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-14030467920997608322011-12-03T08:34:26.441-06:002011-12-03T08:34:26.441-06:00wonderful examples of what you posted about....met...wonderful examples of what you posted about....metaphor, simile, allusion, allegory, alliteration, and other forms of figurative language....and, it's very lovely to boot.<br />..t'were me, I'd 've named it simply ''Would...'' or ''Would That...''Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-27745368653853331222011-12-02T20:34:43.174-06:002011-12-02T20:34:43.174-06:00Stunning lament - love the metaphors and use of co...Stunning lament - love the metaphors and use of conceit - metaphysicalAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-39853628525983621822011-12-02T14:32:27.590-06:002011-12-02T14:32:27.590-06:00A perfected pour of the most bittersweet wine ... ...A perfected pour of the most bittersweet wine ... doesn't make the gall go down any easier, but it manages to frame impossibility with the most gorgeous phrasings. It makes the pain ... exquisite. Fine work, Gay. - BrendanBrendanhttp://blueoran.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-31860869889400253592011-12-02T13:33:43.111-06:002011-12-02T13:33:43.111-06:00WOW.... I love this ....
*dreamy sigh*WOW.... I love this ....<br /><br />*dreamy sigh*Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10094116226854880072noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-45681590082159458742011-12-02T12:52:34.366-06:002011-12-02T12:52:34.366-06:00Fluid, and lots and lots of emotional cargo floati...Fluid, and lots and lots of emotional cargo floating towards that sea-whipped spit of land and that (empty?) chapel. The whoosh of all those W's really makes for a mood inducer, wave on wave of softly released air...good stuff, Gay. Thanks for your work, both in this everyday slog from hour to weary hour, and in that higher calling.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-72933267914547231472011-12-02T11:06:51.900-06:002011-12-02T11:06:51.900-06:00This piece is heavily layered with imagery - it ha...This piece is heavily layered with imagery - it has a gorgeous texture.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-37180245044167507532011-12-02T10:45:27.039-06:002011-12-02T10:45:27.039-06:00Would that I could… would that you would… but the ...Would that I could… would that you would… but the longing to be a single flame remains just that, a longing. Sad, but a lovely lyrical poem of love's lack of fulfillment. I went to school on this piece.Grandmother Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18169464484379536529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-1658172147220908132011-12-02T08:26:15.314-06:002011-12-02T08:26:15.314-06:00light and airy... gentle voice in the windslight and airy... gentle voice in the windsAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-56455350246258814902011-12-01T23:31:44.614-06:002011-12-01T23:31:44.614-06:00I the lyric, you the tune - one of my fav lines. ...I the lyric, you the tune - one of my fav lines. such a magnificent piece - like a symphony!Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-60540586672907390642011-12-01T19:41:07.613-06:002011-12-01T19:41:07.613-06:00What a beautiful ending!What a beautiful ending!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-67374307078789525532011-12-01T18:32:01.210-06:002011-12-01T18:32:01.210-06:00Gay, This reads like a classic when given voice. I...Gay, This reads like a classic when given voice. I read it out loud and had to read it out loud a second time. Your metaphors and similes blend smoothly with the imagery and tone of the piece. Gorgeous work.Beth Winterhttp://eclipsingwinter.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-25194159213821241222011-12-01T17:38:24.132-06:002011-12-01T17:38:24.132-06:00I would turn/ ...I would turn/ Into an empress in a coronet of love.<br /><br />that seems wonderful!! ♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-51308369141435099762011-12-01T14:33:32.327-06:002011-12-01T14:33:32.327-06:00I see many of the poetic devices you so beautifull...I see many of the poetic devices you so beautifully wrote about at dVerse woven throughout this stellar poem.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-27747767493965848502011-12-01T14:19:08.761-06:002011-12-01T14:19:08.761-06:00I posted this because I think this is that amalgam...I posted this because I think this is that amalgamation or synthesis of some of the devices I discussed in the article. Metaphors, similes, and images are used together and independently. I did not have in mind an allegory here; however there are several "grail legend" references throughout especially the chapel high on the sea lashed rocks. <br /><br />I would like to be better at metaphorical poems. My approach and style is so very different from Claudia's who is really a champion with metaphors. Every work of hers turns ideas into metaphoric images that become her own symbols and never fail to create music. She is someone to study!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-11662581915193587392011-12-01T14:16:21.448-06:002011-12-01T14:16:21.448-06:00this is where the beauty in poetry reveals itself
...this is where the beauty in poetry reveals itself<br /><br />each line flows so well<br /><br />PeaceRDhttp://worldcoloredglasses.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-71216337357885781862011-12-01T13:04:48.823-06:002011-12-01T13:04:48.823-06:00Lovely and beautiful as the Milky Way... you trans...Lovely and beautiful as the Milky Way... you transported me with those twinkling sapphires and silvered moon ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-44041430761252095612011-12-01T12:28:08.939-06:002011-12-01T12:28:08.939-06:00this is so beautifully soothing and dreamy gay..I ...this is so beautifully soothing and dreamy gay..I the lyric; you the tune...love this and i so get the pacific balm...sigh..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-76574267938022302492011-12-01T10:24:28.981-06:002011-12-01T10:24:28.981-06:00i like the thought of being caught up in the feath...i like the thought of being caught up in the feather as my immediate though is the feather from forrest gump that just kinda blew around...smiles....really like the second stanza gay...it think as a poet sometimes we can do that...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-75068525720504259472011-12-01T09:47:09.780-06:002011-12-01T09:47:09.780-06:00Lovely, Gay. The cadence drives home the sense of ...Lovely, Gay. The cadence drives home the sense of want that is denied. This would make a wonderful choice to read aloud.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8943152373837433678.post-26950846441501709922011-12-01T06:57:46.332-06:002011-12-01T06:57:46.332-06:00Yours is a gorgeous lament and love song, expressi...Yours is a gorgeous lament and love song, expressing what the lover <i>can't</i> . . . be, do, bridge. We long for that unity of the <i>single burnished golden flame</i>, but there are these times when we can't stem that gap. Just wonderful.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.com