Hector helped me find my voice again,
decades past the place where I began.
By belief in truth that built the world,
I repair the lines that once I blurred.
His imagination has inspired
this rewrite of my old drafts; required
I research technique to write my depths;
try new forms through clear observant steps.
In my rhymes those deeper meanings were
then enriched as meter may confer
purpose rich with music when they merge,
where I find I can unveil this urge --
understand beyond my sense or scope,
ponder intuitions filled with hope.
© Gay Reiser Cannon 2010 All Rights Reserved
decades past the place where I began.
By belief in truth that built the world,
I repair the lines that once I blurred.
His imagination has inspired
this rewrite of my old drafts; required
I research technique to write my depths;
try new forms through clear observant steps.
In my rhymes those deeper meanings were
then enriched as meter may confer
purpose rich with music when they merge,
where I find I can unveil this urge --
understand beyond my sense or scope,
ponder intuitions filled with hope.
© Gay Reiser Cannon 2010 All Rights Reserved
very nice art work and superb poem :)
ReplyDeleteWow. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteto conjugate beyond our verbs tenses...i like that ...smiles....a search back through ones life can be exciting yet dangerous too...stay to the light...nice oneshot!
ReplyDeleteClever my dear. I love the meter and the message
ReplyDeleteGlad you have a partner in crime
One Shot snickers
Love from the Moon
I like your appreciation for classics, form (using strct meter yourself), and even grammar. Solid. - Bill
ReplyDeleteWell Hector isn't so much a partner. He's an old friend I hardly see any more. He made strong cases for set meter. He especially loved a sonnet. He came up with this form which he called Framed Couplets..they rhyme at the first and at the end. He had other rules too..iamb. pent etc. This one isn't quite right. It's tricky to do. I have another that comes closer. I don't have a start rhyme for the first couplet.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the line about conjugate, Brian. I felt good about that one. Thanks Ms.Moon I like your comments and yes, I try to get the message in the form but sometimes I just like to let words play free too. I appreciate all of you reading the work and commenting. Thanks.
It's interesting to look back if only to see how far we've come. And it's wonderful when someone inspires us to new levels...
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this poem. I bet Hector is very proud :)
Your poem makes me think of poetry writing when really feeling it (in the zone) and the words are flowing: "strict meter may confer a purpose rich with music when they merge, may illuminate an inherent urge" Awesome.
ReplyDeleteto know beyond our qualified senses,
ReplyDeleteconjugate beyond our verbs’ tenses.
those two lines took me Bea..:)
love the feeling of this poem in my mind,Hector did a wonderful job :)
To Talon - Thank you. I think that's true..looking back on writing. One sees so many influences. My first stuff was so imitative--wanted to be like Ginsberg and Kerouac..then Eliot, then Stevens...took so long to just want to be a good version of myself.
ReplyDeleteDustus. That's a great compliment. I appreciate that thought--being in the zone. When it rips through you and feels almost automatic, it's the best. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteDesert Rose. Thank you for appreciating those lines. I'm glad they worked. Thank you also for reading and commenting.
ReplyDeletei love your words, but also your art! beautiful work... i would love if you linked up with me for imperfect prose on thursdays... where we share art, and words :) you can post tomorrow evening or anytime on thursday, and if you just wanted to link this post, that would be awesome. anyway, great to 'meet' you! thanks for stopping by my place. e.
ReplyDeleteSounds like everyone could use a Hector every now and then, lucky for you, he has been found:)
ReplyDeleteThe mention of music is a curious one that I especially understood - great poem:)
J. --Yes, Hector is a noble gentleman. He's very shy, sensitive, fierce, and able. He's loyal, funny and I'm amazingly lucky to have met him through a local writer's workshop. A sage, philosopher and teacher to us all, and I miss not seeing him so often any more.
ReplyDeleteEmily..It's late tonight and I'm on the road traveling tomorrow. I may or may not be able to link but I'm not refusing you if I don't, just asking for a raincheck. Thank you for your kind words and your invitation.
ReplyDeleteGreat write here. Really enjoyed this. Be Inspired Today! Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteFor me one of the joys of poetry and finding a form and set of rules and then playing with the language and image within its discipline.Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my poem The final seaside trip. I hope you have a good week!
ReplyDeleteNow here's a fine poem. Great message, with a strong flow.
ReplyDeleteHappy One Shot!
In-Tense poem!
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone for your kind comments and for stopping by to read my poem. I appreciate it. @Eric - In-Tense...ha! like that.
ReplyDeleteI love the meter too on this piece... great write...bkm
ReplyDeleteA muse named Hector, I love it. And I love the outcome of his guidance, especially the last two lines.
ReplyDeleteyou really have studied poetry havent you? this kinda makes me feel good when you praise my work..i am self taught and have never studied in my life..but am learning so much amongst this great community...hector is a great name..thanks for sharing pete
ReplyDeleteSuch lovely comments. I'm liking the work that's here this week so much. I'm late finishing up as I traveled today and had lot on my plate. I will try to look at everyone's as soon as I can. It may start taking a week to read everyone's pieces soon and I think that will be just fine.
ReplyDelete@Pattiken - "a muse named Hector" - that'd make him smile.
Thanks bkm - my more successful attempt is entitled Last Time Around and is the third one on this page. It is meant to be in iambic pentameter less the first unstressed syllable. The first syllables of every two lines and their last syllables should rhyme. Yet when read aloud, it should flow as though it were written in free verse. Ideally the thought (sentence) should end mid-line. You can now see how difficult it is to achieve; but a worthy to try nevertheless. :)
@Pete - Yes, I fell in love with poetry in college and began to write with some understanding then. I changed my major to lit from science and also changed the direction of my life. I've been writing off and on ever since. Poetry and me--quite a journey!
ReplyDeleteP.S. Pete, you are a natural. Sometimes talent is a magnet that pulls you to itself in time. Your work is extraordinary.
ReplyDeleteI knew I would like it here when I read your profile...Dilettante?
ReplyDeleteLove that word, you don't see it every day!
You have a Marvelous site
Thank you G-Man.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting me at "Winsome" and sharing in the "joy of word with word" :)
ReplyDeleteOh ! Beware poets and their muses! I married mine and what a path that has taken us through...
ReplyDeleteLoved your poem through and through...
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@Kim and @nintaziz - Loved both your works. Thanks for coming by to read this. I appreciate your comments. Come again any time.
ReplyDeleteThank you stopping by my blog.
ReplyDeleteI love your poem and your art work. You are very talented.
Have a great weekend.