Keep me as I leave you
In the chamber of your love.
Smell my sleep that penetrates
The fibers of your sheets.
Taste my mouth as invisible
The memory lingers on yours.
Hear my song as my rhythms
Take up syncopation with your heart.
See me framed in your mind
Spinning in the sunlight.
Remember me–
Our intrinsic words
Our inherent hearts
Our intuitive eyes.
And know wherever
I am
You swell within me
I quake with expectant desire
And I want you.
Not just yourself
but the music
in your body
And the fire
deep inside
your
soul.
© Gay Reiser Cannon 2010 All Rights Reserved
2/14/11
A poem as fiery as O'Keefe's painting. You've got the Valentine's Day spirit down in this one, dear. Enjoyed the memories it brought of younger days.
ReplyDeleteYou sweetie pie! Thanks, it's not new but I thought it captured the day! I'm having fun with the children here. It's good to catch up. They're busy through the day so I can work and keep up to an extent with all my lovely friends here & on twitter. Spring is just around the corner and you'll be in the blaze of cannas and other things blooming around you as I picture you.
ReplyDeleteRomantic, effective, nice weaviness to the work.
ReplyDeletebeautifully imaginative! love the painting and goes well with your poem!
ReplyDeleteNot only are your words beautiful but the form of this poem is divine!
ReplyDeleteI love the shape and flow of this poem. The image the poem creates mimics the curves and slopes of the painting beautifully.
ReplyDelete"Take up syncopation with your heart."
is my favorite line, beautiful rhythm to it.
Happy Valentine's Day, girl. (a day late, sorry!)
ReplyDeleteHappy V.D. to ya, too. Pretty poem, but I don't think it's of the same caliber of some of your other poems. It says all the right things, but its heart isn't pumping with the usual vigor and fire. Older poem, maybe? I'm curious what your love poem today would be, if it would be about the same kind of love. Eros shouts everywhere -- in beloved, in a a flower or fish. But you knew that. - Brendan
ReplyDeleteYes - this is a lazy post Brendan. I wrote this some time ago and as I'm off with grandkids and all didn't have time to come up with a proper new one. I'll try to think in new terms and see if in a short time I can't write a more contemporary love poem and I'll consider it for you as you were so good to ask. :-)s to you dear one.
ReplyDeleteTo everyone else - It's just a silly love song, but that's what happens on some valentines days, isn't it?
PS Take a look at my TANKA - it's a subtle sort of sexy love song. I was fairly happy with it.
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perfect form of painted words for this piece of art...Georgia would be so pleased....lovely Gay...bkm
ReplyDeleteLove the flow of the words and the cascade form. Wonderfully written.
ReplyDeletewow evocative write...i love the structure of it...and the desire for the music inside...ahh....lovely!
ReplyDeleteSexy poem. I like the imagery, especially "smell my sleep"
ReplyDeleteThe shape reminds me of a tornado, lost in the remembrance and swept up in the tumult of love. Gay, doesn't matter if it's an oldie, it's a goodie ;)
ReplyDeleteAh, it's lovely, I'm clapping furiously! The picture rages all the while the wonderfully placed words build intention and desire. Sweltering!
ReplyDeletePassionate longing. I feel it, Gay.
ReplyDelete(If you want me so badly, just say so! Sheesh! Stop beating around the bush! LOL!)
Why Bubba...I didn't think I'd given myself away. Sigh...been longing for you, you know !! :-)
ReplyDeleteoh - la - la - what passion in your lines gay...need a fire extinguisher...
ReplyDeleteexquisite, gay... loved this especially:
ReplyDeleteHear my song as my rhythms
Take up syncopation with your heart.
gorgeous sensuality and I love the art that accompanies, it sets just the right tone!
ReplyDeleteExcitment regaled as the rhythym of the piece gripped a fire 'swelled within' spinning' 'taste my mouth' tingles ~ passion throughout ~ Brilliant Loved it ~ especially listening to your Chopin you tube clip alongside ~ Lib ~ @libithina http://t.co/tXpkzwp
ReplyDeleteGreat piece Gay. Awesome tone to go along with that stunning picture! ♥
ReplyDeleteI like the undulation of the poem structure, like the love of which it speaks.
ReplyDeleteYou swell within me
ReplyDeleteI quake with expectant desire
And I want you.
Not just yourself
but the music
in your body
And the fire
deep inside
your
soul.
Wonderful sensuality and passion. I burned my tongue on my computer monitor. (Never mind what it was doing there!) This is yet another demonstration of your excellent writing!
I love the form this one took - aided visually in the manufacture of a delightful flow. That it brimmed with such passionate fire as well only added to its appeal. Sensual in tone and execution. With an intriguing flower-fire picture as well. Lot of layers to peel away in that one.
ReplyDeleteHope Valentine's treated you right!
That is one sensual poem. Really good, Gay.
ReplyDeleteVery sweet of all of you valentines to stop by today. I hope I made it to your place. It was stop and go as I am a guest these days at my son's house and there's a lot of coming & going. I promise to be more diligent in the future. Ms. Georgia O'Keefe would love your remarks too I'm sure. She lived in the town I grew up in long before I did but I understand she was a bit of a rowdy girl herself :)
ReplyDeleteWoww!! This was sensuous and fiery, Gay!! And the visual you created with your words, shaped to look like a flame..well, that was simply perfection!!
ReplyDeleteThe poem is so apt for the occasion... really nice!
Hi Gay
ReplyDeleteThe music in your body... so beautifully said.. I liked it very much...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Twitter @VerseEveryDay
Great musical style - well crafted.
ReplyDeleteThat is absolutely beautiful! A lovely poem for Valentines. I didn't dare post my valentines poem on my blog as such, it is tucked away in my poems page at the bottom.
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