hahaha you rock gay! woo, way to kick it up a notch and how creative, love your concrete. edgy and i know just how you feel there in the end bein a good ole southern boy myself...smiles.
Thanks y'all. Appreciate the comments. @Brian - glad it gave you a smile. It was fun to do, but frustrating. Blog wanted to mess up my "form". @ Arron - a sonnet - you tell me. I was just working the concrete shape. @zongrik - It is SO REFRESHING when we figure out New Yorkers (translate that to Yankees) when we finally realize that some people put it right there in your face, don't talk "behind your back" and give you the right to do the same. I figure it's why just about everybody in their hearts from the South would rather be there. Not everyone, of course, just the best of us!
i like the form and structure..ha..ha... i thought my eyes were deceiving me. i do say it though when i stub my toe or accidentally bump into something ~
@Fireblossom - I'm not sure it qualifies as "concrete" either but it's my first stab at it. And bloggingdom stabbed back. No composing going on here unless you're a whiz at html. Thanks!
HA! A lot of depth to that one little word. I say it *and* write it, but only when I really really mean it now--used to just be second nature, but then I went to work around some Southern type ladies and learned though they would say all kinds of dirt about you behind your back, they got offended by the old Anglo-Saxon. Loved it, Gay.
oh, gay, I love, love, love the F*** out of this! It looks awesome, your words are comical and coming from you puts it over the top. It is by far my favorite one yet today. I'm so proud of you on so many levels I can hardly stand it - lol :)
Well, I laughed out loud at first sight and again when I read it. Despite being raised by wolves that had the vocabulary of sailors I couldn't say the F-word until my roommate in college said it aloud for about 6 months straight. Full of wit and a wonderful addition to my evening (spent at an opera recital with super stuck up lawyers and engineers :)). Heavens, word verification: rumor!
This is such a departure for you that I wonder what other treasures are in store for us. I now feel terrible about posting another lamentation-- how on earth did you get Blogger to cooperate with this? xxxxj
Expletives are great and your lot use them con giusto fantastico! I use to be hopless at swearing until a black woman from Chicago taught me and now I'm fucking brilliant at it (my performance somewhat diminished by the wrong accent.)
Thanks y'all. @Claudia and Jen - It didn't take long to get it written in the letters form - what took a while was getting it onto the blog. Initially I thought I could create it in html (because I'm so knowledgeable about it - ha (NOT), and it wouldn't play. I tried in compose, but of course not. So back to the drawing board. I'm fairly familiar with GIMP (and photoshop) but I don't currently have it installed. So I rebuilt it in GIMP, but that had it's own difficulties because when you transfer a picture onto a blog it compresses it; so the print size on the picture was reduced to so small it was really hard to read or even see the outlines that well. Therefore, I took it back started with a much LARGER canvas, did it again, and brought it over, putting it up as a LARGE picture again once it was compressed and this was the size I got. Yeah, it took time, but at least I figured out the steps. One has to save it in GIMP as a .jpg for it to bring over. I think I am going to try it in PAINT as that's on everyone with WINDOWS machine and see if it's doable from there. If so, I'll cover shape, concrete poetry on FormForAll this week.
i'd wear the t-shirt...no problem, I'll shout it at the top of my lungs when I'm ticked, but I have never, ever, used it in my writing...isn't that funny! I thought this so #$&@'en awesome! ;)
Yeah, sell a t shirt. Excellent write, Well written and very easy to read! There is something wrong with me, I am the exact same way. Not verbally, but in my mind, I just look at them and know they are f'n mean. I have only let the b word slide out 3 times in 20 years. The f word out loud 2X so you know it was drastic! I am sorry it wasn't to the ones who deserved it.
That was fun to read, I have recently returned to work after being gone from the bank 10yrs, I have taken that word up again, bankers have foul mouths. My son is so disappointed in me.
Very clever, but I'm a little concerned... I say "Bless your heart" all the time :S Is it an insult in some parts of the world? I'm english and clueless :)
Ha ha, you broke two taboos with one kick at the brick wall that is alternately proper language and its formal convention. Field goal from 50 yards out, obscenity clearing the uprights. -- Brendan
@Suzy Q - "Bless Your Heart" probably started as a blessing but over the years in the American South it's become a "code" word among snotty, but "nice" women to let someone know they're annoying, whining, "getting on their nerves", or they don't like you very much. They also begin gossip with, "Bless her heart, poor thing -- she can't help it if...(she's a bad mother, a poor employee...you get the idea)
LOVE this, Gay! and your form post at dVerse is awesome! thank you for sharing your knowledge of poetry forms, at One Stop Poetry and dVerse ~ Poets Pub. i have learned so much from you and look forward to learning more.
AWESOME! Gay I used to think you were a shy, conservative type.. hehe! You've shaken my world to its very foundations.... You might like my poem on the word 'c**t'... I think I used it 18 times. Trying dispel the myths and ask why it has become the single most offensive word in the English Language...
Ha. For those who came late to this party..this was posted for a prompt to break a taboo. It was followed by this other concrete poem, which isn't quite so stark and took a lot more time: http://hollyheir.wordpress.com/2011/10/20/1203/#comments
hahaha you rock gay! woo, way to kick it up a notch and how creative, love your concrete. edgy and i know just how you feel there in the end bein a good ole southern boy myself...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThis is outrageous gay! lol
ReplyDeletelove the structure - is it a sonnet?
This really tickled me pink - (im basic i know)
great idea gay
you got me on the "bless your heart you poor thing"
ReplyDeletei'm from NYC and when i found out this is what southerners say do, instead of just being straight up...welllllll i could NOT believe it.
Thanks y'all. Appreciate the comments. @Brian - glad it gave you a smile. It was fun to do, but frustrating. Blog wanted to mess up my "form".
ReplyDelete@ Arron - a sonnet - you tell me. I was just working the concrete shape.
@zongrik - It is SO REFRESHING when we figure out New Yorkers (translate that to Yankees) when we finally realize that some people put it right there in your face, don't talk "behind your back" and give you the right to do the same. I figure it's why just about everybody in their hearts from the South would rather be there. Not everyone, of course, just the best of us!
i like the form and structure..ha..ha... i thought my eyes were deceiving me. i do say it though when i stub my toe or accidentally bump into something ~
ReplyDeleteThis is one kind of form I love! I'm not sure if this qualifies as a concrete poem, but regardless, it's original and provocative and slyly fun.
ReplyDelete@Fireblossom - I'm not sure it qualifies as "concrete" either but it's my first stab at it. And bloggingdom stabbed back. No composing going on here unless you're a whiz at html. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteOh so CLEVER and BRILLIANT! I actually thought of writing one with dirty words, too. You've taken it to a whole new dimension!
ReplyDeleteHA! A lot of depth to that one little word. I say it *and* write it, but only when I really really mean it now--used to just be second nature, but then I went to work around some Southern type ladies and learned though they would say all kinds of dirt about you behind your back, they got offended by the old Anglo-Saxon. Loved it, Gay.
ReplyDeleteGosh, just a word but must have taken a while to construct.
ReplyDeleteHank
Thanks for taking great pains to put this together. A treat...
ReplyDeleteOkay, I just laughed my ass off on this one. Concrete curse words for the win! Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteGene
oh, gay, I love, love, love the F*** out of this! It looks awesome, your words are comical and coming from you puts it over the top. It is by far my favorite one yet today. I'm so proud of you on so many levels I can hardly stand it - lol :)
ReplyDeleteWell, I laughed out loud at first sight and again when I read it. Despite being raised by wolves that had the vocabulary of sailors I couldn't say the F-word until my roommate in college said it aloud for about 6 months straight. Full of wit and a wonderful addition to my evening (spent at an opera recital with super stuck up lawyers and engineers :)). Heavens, word verification: rumor!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a departure for you that I wonder what other treasures are in store for us. I now feel terrible about posting another lamentation-- how on earth did you get Blogger to cooperate with this? xxxxj
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome. And, I also hate being patronized, lol.
ReplyDeleteso cool gay - it must have taken you hours to get it into this form...love it ....so you're shouting at other drivers...eh...? haha - loved it
ReplyDeleteExpletives are great and your lot use them con giusto fantastico! I use to be hopless at swearing until a black woman from Chicago taught me and now I'm
ReplyDeletefucking brilliant at it (my performance somewhat diminished by the wrong accent.)
Thanks y'all. @Claudia and Jen - It didn't take long to get it written in the letters form - what took a while was getting it onto the blog. Initially I thought I could create it in html (because I'm so knowledgeable about it - ha (NOT), and it wouldn't play. I tried in compose, but of course not. So back to the drawing board. I'm fairly familiar with GIMP (and photoshop) but I don't currently have it installed. So I rebuilt it in GIMP, but that had it's own difficulties because when you transfer a picture onto a blog it compresses it; so the print size on the picture was reduced to so small it was really hard to read or even see the outlines that well. Therefore, I took it back started with a much LARGER canvas, did it again, and brought it over, putting it up as a LARGE picture again once it was compressed and this was the size I got. Yeah, it took time, but at least I figured out the steps. One has to save it in GIMP as a .jpg for it to bring over. I think I am going to try it in PAINT as that's on everyone with WINDOWS machine and see if it's doable from there. If so, I'll cover shape, concrete poetry on FormForAll this week.
ReplyDeleteWell they say Anglo-Saxon words are best for being concrete! I mean 'go copulate' limp or what
ReplyDeleteThis is brilliant! Brilliant! Let's put this on t-shirts!
ReplyDeletei'd wear the t-shirt...no problem, I'll shout it at the top of my lungs when I'm ticked, but I have never, ever, used it in my writing...isn't that funny! I thought this so #$&@'en awesome! ;)
ReplyDeleteGay, I'm going to say this very simply and plainly :
ReplyDeleteThis is FUCKing Awesome.
-Pounds
Yeah, sell a t shirt. Excellent write, Well written and very easy to read! There is something wrong with me, I am the exact same way. Not verbally, but in my mind, I just look at them and know they are f'n mean. I have only let the b word slide out 3 times in 20 years.
ReplyDeleteThe f word out loud 2X so you know it was drastic! I am sorry it wasn't to the ones who deserved it.
http://seeworldhere.wordpress.com/2011/10/16/our-world-today-they-know/
That was fun to read, I have recently returned to work after being gone from the bank 10yrs, I have taken that word up again, bankers have foul mouths. My son is so disappointed in me.
ReplyDeleteOML, freakn brilliant write, Gay! Dang, I wish I had been the clever one to fashion this one...you rock, lady! ~
ReplyDeleteVery clever, but I'm a little concerned... I say "Bless your heart" all the time :S Is it an insult in some parts of the world?
ReplyDeleteI'm english and clueless :)
My wife once flipped off a driver who cut us off in traffic.
ReplyDeleteMy mother was sitting in the back seat.
She laughed.
Good poem, Gay.
Ha ha, you broke two taboos with one kick at the brick wall that is alternately proper language and its formal convention. Field goal from 50 yards out, obscenity clearing the uprights. -- Brendan
ReplyDeleteso that's what goes on in your mind...lol, ur granny square background seems a little out-of-place today!
ReplyDelete@Suzy Q - "Bless Your Heart" probably started as a blessing but over the years in the American South it's become a "code" word among snotty, but "nice" women to let someone know they're annoying, whining, "getting on their nerves", or they don't like you very much. They also begin gossip with, "Bless her heart, poor thing -- she can't help it if...(she's a bad mother, a poor employee...you get the idea)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant stuff!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
I NEVER KNEW what "...bless your heart, etc." meant until now--only took 78 years--grin!
ReplyDeleteThis is the funniest, bestest post I've read in many days!!! Bless your heart, girl--grin!!!
This is great--I love it! I agree with Mama Zen--let's put it on T-shirts!
ReplyDeleteLOVE this, Gay! and your form post at dVerse is awesome! thank you for sharing your knowledge of poetry forms, at One Stop Poetry and dVerse ~ Poets Pub. i have learned so much from you and look forward to learning more.
ReplyDeleteagain, just LOVE this!
dani {formerly haiku love songs}
AWESOME! Gay I used to think you were a shy, conservative type.. hehe! You've shaken my world to its very foundations.... You might like my poem on the word 'c**t'... I think I used it 18 times. Trying dispel the myths and ask why it has become the single most offensive word in the English Language...
ReplyDeleteGay this is fabulous
This is awesome. Definitely T-Shirt material:)
ReplyDeleteOh yes! You echo my thoughts in so many ways. This is simply too cool for words. Very clever.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE YOU!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI say it a lot too. But seldom write.
And being a Northern Girl I don't think the "well, bless yer sweet little soul..." ever:)
This is SO FUNNY!!!!! I agree -- tee-shirt fodder.
xoxo
Well, you surprised me with this one!
ReplyDeleteHa. For those who came late to this party..this was posted for a prompt to break a taboo. It was followed by this other concrete poem, which isn't quite so stark and took a lot more time:
ReplyDeletehttp://hollyheir.wordpress.com/2011/10/20/1203/#comments
Yes it is a concrete poem. It's also heaps of fun!
ReplyDeleteLove this so much, you are an inspiration, Libby @Libbypoetry xx
ReplyDeleteYou rock! :D
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