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| Embossed - original artwork © Gay Reiser Cannon |
Your glance sets my heart aflutter
Your heart, my heart's glove.
My body, even my soul, halts
My heart fills, four vessels of love.
Memories dissolve, fear flees
My blood's the nectar of love.
A second lasts a lifetime
More exquisite than a dove.
Before and after disappear
I stumble through a fog.
A pool lies somewhere behind your eyes
Filled with your quiet love.
Your nod urges me to take the plunge,
Submerge myself in love.
Your smile provides the shove,
In gay abandon, I swim in love.
© Gay Reiser Cannon - May 2019
A ghazal
Smiling I am... such should love be... the final line of swimming in love makes me happy.
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of a ‘heart's glove’ and how beautiful is the thought of plunging, submerging and swimming in love!
ReplyDeleteIt is good to see you Gay. This is a lovely poem about love, about plunging into love .
ReplyDeleteMany thanks Bjorn, Kim, and Toni. It's refreshing to be back. Maybe I need to be busy to write poetry. Otherwise I drift from one thing to another. I think romance is a subject that never gets old and there are such a variety of them over a life time, not only with people but with all the things we "fall in love with". Good seeing you again!!
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda!
DeleteI feel so good reading this Gay - like having butterflies when one falls in love.
ReplyDeleteThanks for hosting.
Much appreciated Grace. I want to thank you for inviting me. I miss reading everyone, but it is a time consuming task and it's better to let the team members change from time to time. I'll try to link more often these days. I've been away too long.
DeleteThat was beautiful Gay, and now I kniw for certain thst I do not understand this form - but you most certainly do... well written!
ReplyDeleteI think you did just fine. Be confident. The journey is as important as the destination especially in poetry. Thanks for coming here and sharing.
DeleteSo beautifully romantic
ReplyDeleteAH! How sweet and heartwarming is this song of love and loving! I really like the second line repetitions as well as every couplet being its own unit of poetry.
ReplyDeleteThe last couplet with its "maqta" is certainly very well done.
Thank you for your kind words. You're an invaluable resource to the dVerse team. I enjoy reading your work very much!
DeleteI like those four vessels filled with love. And how lucky you are to have a name that works so well for this! It's a poem that sings.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I think in this I wanted to those heady days when one is just "falling in love" and "falling into the idea of love" as well.
DeleteWhat would poets have done without Love as a theme? Thankfully we don't need to know. So nice to read you again. I thought the first line of the couplet carried the rhyme scheme, and the second line had the word refrain... The way you need it is much mo re expansive; cool.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking today Glenn, my old friend. I've missed reading you and happy you are continuing to write and post. I'll try to be more diligent.
DeleteI love "swimming in love". It suggests a happy twosome. Like your art work, as well.
ReplyDeleteYes, I have to admit I let one word lead me to another as I created these couplets...swimming seemed apt after "pools". :-)
DeleteI will try again, but this is the third time I've tried to make a comment and they won't accept my blog URL. Then when they show the photos to answer questions about, it is covering up the photo.. and the vocal clue can't be heard. Guess I'm having a bad night..At any rate, I enjoyed your poem.. Here goes again.
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry you had problems. Those have plagued me in the past, but this is the first time my blog refused as far as I know. I'm glad you got it up this time. I didn't know it was so difficult. I'm glad you liked my little love song.
DeleteI like how you use physical objects to define love--heart's glove, tides, and pools. I love swimming in love and how you work your name into it. Lovely art work, too!
ReplyDeleteThank you. This is my second ghazal in a lifetime. I am contemplating one of the modern ones to write sometime this month. Keep writing. I'll be around to read as I get the chance!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery and I like how you include your name in gay abandon!
ReplyDeleteLovely and romantic. I like the way you introduced your name, in disguise, in the last verse.
ReplyDeletecraftily done!
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeletePerhaps I need to bend the rules for the form as you have here. This flows beautifully. I especially like the 6th couplet.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I rarely am a "slave" to the form. I just write to make it conform. I make exceptions sometimes, but usually I find all the famous poets deviated and then returned. Like a cadenza in the music or a little jazz extemporaneous built in on the side. It is the way I write and "feel" my poetry. It has to be a song of you I believe.
ReplyDeleteLove how you mostly sick to the "ove" sound, but break...just the once with a slant rhyme.
ReplyDeleteBefore and after disappear
ReplyDeleteI stumble through a fog. Yes, that sounds like love.
I apologize for any of you who aren't able to leave comments here. I don't know why but I will try to contact blogger about it. You can email me at gaycannon@yahoo.com. I love hearing from all of you! Sad about those of you who can't make it work. I wonder if there's now a disconnect for those on wordpress. I have a wordpress blog too. If I ever get this next ghazal written, I will post it there on hollyheir.wordpress.com - thanks all!
ReplyDeleteThese couplets are exquisite, polished gemstones. I love the use of your name in the last couplet.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Much appreciated.
ReplyDeleteThis is certainly a love poem to be fully immersed in and I think that is the power of ghazal writing. You certainly bring the reader into those feelings through elegant lines and images. Thanks for the inspiring ideas on ghazal writing. You certainly brought back my memories of ghazals and I hadn't realised there were so many contemporary versions too.
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ReplyDeleteتعتبر شركة نقل الاثاث بالمنصورة واحدة من أفضل الشركات في مجال نقل العفش في مصر. توفر الشركة خدمات عالية الجودة وموثوق بها لعملائها. تتميز بخبرتها الواسعة في هذا المجال وفريق عمل محترف ومدرب تدريبًا جيدًا.