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Monday, January 3, 2011

HEARTS AND FLOWERS


                      Love,
                      We're valentines of blood.
                      Lying like the hearts of blackbirds
                      Dropped in the snow.


                      Your frozen desire unwinding
                      Beyond the winter,
                      Erect as bluebonnets;
                      A blue nude by a stone.


                      Indifferent objector resisting
                      My repressed passion.  This
                      Sealed desire in mysterious facets;
                      An odalisque hot as red petals
                      On the flowers of despair.


                      Surrounded by greedy creepers.
                      Tenacious jasmine belles
                      Yearning for their season,
                      Girls releasing crimson agonies.
                      With their ivory fingers
                      Cruel desire ruptured
                      In spurts of yellow juice.


                      These invitations to destruction
                      Are transferred through thoughts of
                      Sapphire and topaz, and become
                      Splinters of fractured rubies
                      Thrown to the black night sky--
                      Bleeding stars of tortured doubts.

             
                      © Gay Reiser Cannon All Rights Reserved 1/3/11
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31 comments:

  1. Steve IsaakJanuary 3, 2011 at 5:11 PM

    Emotionally-acute, starkly and occasionally desirous-effect work. Oustanding, stark.

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  2. UnknownJanuary 3, 2011 at 7:23 PM

    powerful!

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  3. hedgewitchJanuary 3, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    From opening to close, this one just builds in intensity and image. What an excellent, excellent poem, Gay. "...An odalisque hot as red petals/On the flowers of despair..." And the ending is killer--wistful, mysterious and cerebral. You're raising the bar for all of us here, my dear.

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  4. FireblossomJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:18 PM

    omG. What was on YOUR corn flakes this morning, Gay? Every word of this is sensational. Just. sensational. Wowwwwww.

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  5. Diana LeeJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:23 PM

    Every line sharp as a pointed stick...and really wonderful.

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  6. anthonynorthJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:30 PM

    Full of emotion and some great lines.

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  7. BeachannyJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:47 PM

    This was not meant as a curse to the beautiful redwing blackbirds who occasionally fly through. I wrote it before word of their mass death. May the poor singing birds rest in peace.

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  8. BeachannyJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:57 PM

    Thank you for all the comments everyone. Appreciate that you like it.

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  9. TimoteoJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:34 PM

    Ah detect sumthin bout SEX in there! (Thet's cuz ah know some of them there words have a double meaning!)

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  10. BeachannyJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:49 PM

    Well captured Timoteo my friends..sex given and sex deprived too.

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  11. PattiKenJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:55 PM

    Wow, such emotional turmoil in the garden of love. This is very powerful, Gay.

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  12. Brother OllieJanuary 4, 2011 at 8:21 PM

    Great images and imagery!

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  13. Desert RoseJanuary 4, 2011 at 11:37 PM

    So emotional,Poignant Rising images are dancing within your lines dear Gay :) very powerful! i can't get enough of reading this..you just left me speechless and loving it :))

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  14. AnonymousJanuary 4, 2011 at 11:45 PM

    Lying like the hearts of blackbirds
    Dropped in the snow.

    beautiful photo, complimented by your poetry.
    I can envision that black night sky.

    Very visual, engaging poem.

    I can see the bright red on the snow, red from the hearts of blackbirds.

    beautifully written!

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  15. signed...bkmJanuary 5, 2011 at 12:03 AM

    that last stanza my favorite...all those colors and jewels thrown onto a night sky...beautiful...bkm

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  16. SheilaJanuary 5, 2011 at 1:22 AM

    for me, this elicits a sense of fear yet excitement and also confusion - like a young girl being tempted to, but advised not to, give her sexuality away, no matter how beautiful the offer appears. Mysterious, I like it!

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  17. BubbaJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:20 AM

    Pardon the pun, but this is a real jewel of a poem, Gay.

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  18. Brian MillerJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:23 AM

    wow gay...this is excellent...the emotions tight...and great imagery

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  19. MarshyJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:25 AM

    got to say it...this was one of your best yet...amazing poem...really damn good gay..cheers pete

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  20. AsobimeJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:28 AM

    Beautifully written, strong metaphors, imagery...

    flows without a stumble.

    Gorgeous, Gay.

    Lady Nyo

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  21. Monkey ManJanuary 5, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Very powerful metaphors throughout. It floats and flows yet has strength in prose.

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  22. gautami tripathyJanuary 5, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    Raw, powerful and very touching. Wonderful lines...

    Here is my one shot:
    musical whirlwind

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  23. GlynnJanuary 5, 2011 at 12:40 PM

    Invitations to destruction - this poem moves from life to death and back again until they become the same. Great poem, Gay.

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  24. UnknownJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:26 PM

    very straight yet complex.... I thoroughly enjoyed this!

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  25. KavitaJanuary 5, 2011 at 4:08 PM

    Oh my my!!! What a metaphoric representation of emotions... absolutely delightful to read!! Left so much for the mind to read into... a superbly colorful work, Gay!!!
    A very happy new year to you!!!

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  26. AnonymousJanuary 5, 2011 at 4:39 PM

    Fantastic and emotional...have to keep reading like the words used are faceted to many levels. Then there is the contrast of black and white in the photo that draw it in even deeper/ your words are warm still on the ice and snow of it! Excellent writing! ~April

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  27. ClaudiaJanuary 6, 2011 at 7:59 AM

    OMG Gay! I'm almost afraid of meeting you...what a tight and sensual write ...Lying like the hearts of blackbirds Dropped in the snow...my goodness that was passionate. thanks for the lovely birthday card - i'm looking forward to meeting you :=)

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  28. BeachannyJanuary 6, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    Claudia, I promise I'm not scary. Really. Actually when I wrote it, it was a response to a few people saying my poetry was all "hearts and flowers" not thrilling and cutting edge. I just thought, I'll show them some 'hearts and flowers' and this is what I came up with.

    Thanks everyone for the praise. I really never knew if it was any good as it was a response to a little negative criticism. Seems like I do that. If someone says one thing, I set out to show them! So I'm glad it resonated. I looked out my window and talked about the hard life of flowers and dark nights of stars.

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  29. AnonymousJanuary 6, 2011 at 3:02 PM

    vivid visuals, quite evocative. You don't disappoint :) Extra marks for getting 'odalisque' in there!

    Warmest Salad

    Luke @ WordSalad

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  30. CorbieJanuary 7, 2011 at 9:57 AM

    Gay, passionate and very vivid. I appreciate all of your works. They are striking and your word usage is always fantastic. Thank you for sharing.

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  31. moondustwriterJanuary 8, 2011 at 12:17 AM

    last line - ouch
    love can fracture

    really profound piece Gay

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