At The Harbor - © Judith Clay |
to naturally integrate and expand
on the platform of the harbor.
As her fish re-learns to breathe, she stands.
Time, her constant companion advances
yet she and fish stand still as beacons.
They await the shifting circumstances
as the molecule movement lessens.
Seasons pass, ships slip past jetties.
Her fish begins to grow fingers and feet.
The tides ebb and the sea becomes brassy;
hillside trees loosen trunks, bend their knees.
Suzanne and the fish then dance in symmetry
with the ocean's waves, the raindrops, and the trees.
© Gay Reiser Cannon * 8.27.13
All Rights Reserved
A sonnet
Posted for OpenLinkNight @dVersepoets
By the end of the first verse, I feel totally pulled into the picture, and enjoy the way you play with words in each line - a perfect response and fit to the image.
ReplyDeleteThe vividness of it is wonderful and the atmosphere of waiting is well weaved in this poem. I loved it, for the feel and the tenderness of it.
ReplyDeleteha. how fanciful dancing with her fish...she held him long enough for evolution to take affect...relearning to breath might be brutal...smiles...love the alliteration in this gay...it pulls the verse right along....
ReplyDeleteSweet ekphrastic poem, Gay. I think you had some fun with the alliteration. (I was thinking I'd have to be careful saying aloud "seasons pass, ships slip".) I'm struck by how, in the image, Suzanne's expression mirrors the fish's own.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful use of assonance and alliteration. Plus, you disguise it well. It's not contrived but subtly represented in the piece. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteTime, her constant companion advances
ReplyDeleteyet she and fish stand still as beacons.
They await the shifting circumstances
Wonderful 'dancing' movements going together, Gay! The fish element provides some respite through the stanza thereafter! Nicely!
Hank
An enjoyable read, Gay. I can picture Suzanne waiting and waiting....and I loved the ending with the dance with the ocean's waves, raindrops, and trees!
ReplyDeletePretty nice dance here--glad it wasn't a cold fish! (Ha!) Thanks for the smile. k.
ReplyDeleteI love what you did with this picture, Gay. And the sonnet works so well. I'm becoming more and more enamoured by this for, thanks, in large part to you.
ReplyDeleteA fanciful good write.>KB
ReplyDeleteTime - the great healer. Red is a beacon color, and this poem offers a bit of hope that everything will be all right if we are patient.
ReplyDeleteThere's so much to like here. but the fish learning to re-breath floored me, and the closing lines are just wonderful verse.
ReplyDeleteThank you for a great write.
hey gay
ReplyDeleteso tight and punchy with wonderfully dynamic imagery that
opens up and out as I read. a perfect pic choice works wonders
in conjunction with the cracking Poetry that I honestly
didn't want to end but its defiantly best
to leave them wanting more:
bravo!
i love her heart - that she stands with him until he re-learns and starts developing... there's a tender care in this..well played gay
ReplyDeleteWhat an enjoyable sonnet to read Gay - it was whimsy and tightly woven and your words pulled me in from the very beginning - thank you.
ReplyDeleteLove how you expanded on the picture & essentially created one of your own.
ReplyDeleteA playful goddess...watching the ocean and her fish companion evolve into higher forms...Well, this is what I see...and I love it...and in sonnet form, yet! A truly creative, joyful piece :)) xo ~jackie~
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful Gay. Made me think of aging, and how hopefully by the near end, we're dancing with the waves. I love the fairytale feel of this. Really enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteThis was a crazy, idiosyncratic splash of wonderful. I love the imagery but more the idea that one can wait for the ones that we love- however long it takes. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful imagination Gay! A wonderful little journey, this read was.....
ReplyDeleteMarvelous to see another inspiration from Judith's work. There's a real connection between you two. This one immersed me :).
ReplyDeleteA wonderful sonnet, Gay. Every word well placed.
ReplyDeletePamela
from the first words, Rare Suzanne, you pull us in - what a great introduction.
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