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Saturday, August 24, 2013

Follow the Wind

© Judith Clay for dversepoets.com
zero
day!
I
(and Sam,
the lion, leading
in his pointed party hat)
follow the wind which blows things that fly.
Things we found fun before the wind song insisted we outrace the schoolhouse
chasing more than dreams, or luck, or knowledge; feeling fate on our faces, time slips the pavement and all things change.

 © Gay Reiser Cannon
8.24.13 * All Rights Reserved
Posted for dversepoets Poetics - hosted by Claudia featuring the artwork of Judith Clay
and for imaginary garden with real toads - hosted by Hedgewitch
a fibonacci poem consisting of  0,1,1,2,3,5,8,13,21  where "zero" is the first line.
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22 comments:

  1. ClaudiaAugust 25, 2013 at 3:20 AM

    cool work on the fibonacci gay and also cool take on judith's image... there's so much between the lines - it feels as if whole story books live there and wait to be opened and read...

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  2. AnonymousAugust 25, 2013 at 3:29 AM

    Really nice Fibonacci, I love feeling fate on our faces & time slips the pavement...great lines. It has a wonderful whimsical childlike feel just like the picture.

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  3. kaykualaAugust 25, 2013 at 3:45 AM

    Great fibonacci poem, Gay! It provides a refreshing respite from the other's. '..Chasing them and all things change!.. Nicely!

    Hank

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  4. Brian MillerAugust 25, 2013 at 6:57 AM

    time slips the pavement and all things change...what an interesting line to me...things happen so fast, things we never see coming...

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  5. GraceAugust 25, 2013 at 7:21 AM

    Zero day, I love those moments when time slips away ~ Lovely work on the form too Gay ~

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  6. MaryAugust 25, 2013 at 7:41 AM

    Ah, yes......time slips the pavement and all things change. I can definitely identify with that. I enjoyed your 'fib.'

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  7. Kerry O'ConnorAugust 25, 2013 at 8:38 AM

    I love the little lion in his party hat! You have managed to tell a fine story within the confines of a very tight form. Kudos.

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  8. Kathryn DycheAugust 25, 2013 at 9:17 AM

    Love this so much. Especially love that last line.

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  9. hedgewitchAugust 25, 2013 at 9:25 AM

    Very creative, Gay, especially including the zero, which threw me off at first, but worked charmingly.I especially like that you ventured into that long last line--there was no feeling of awkwardness to it at all--it seemed just the right length for what you had to say, which means you have mastered yet another form here, I think. I also like the poem as a poem very much, with its poignant sense of childhood left behind in the relentless gale of life. Thanks so much for participating with us at The Garden.

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    1. BeachannyAugust 25, 2013 at 10:19 AM

      Hi Joy - well I just wrote my second 55 the other day and thought I'd like to do more. I counted the words in the fibonacci starting with the first 1 and realized I was a word short and that's what gave me the idea of beginning with zero. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I've missed you. I did buy the book (Gemini/Scorpio/Capricorn) the other day and look forward to spending more time with three of my favorite poets.

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  10. AnonymousAugust 25, 2013 at 10:22 AM

    very fine piece. the closure is epic!

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  11. AnonymousAugust 25, 2013 at 11:16 AM

    brilliant ~ M

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  12. EllaAugust 25, 2013 at 11:41 AM

    Yes, this last line really sums it all up! No matter what we must keep pedaling on
    our circle of life~
    I loved the Zero!
    YOU are so clever~

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  13. brudbergAugust 25, 2013 at 12:22 PM

    I would love a lion in a party hat... love the fibonacci and how you connected it to the picture... a happy poem

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  14. BeachannyAugust 25, 2013 at 12:33 PM

    (Sam's just a cat who pretends or maybe thinks he IS a lion!)

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  15. ManicddailyAugust 25, 2013 at 3:16 PM

    Feeling fate on our faces -- such a beautiful line. Sometimes that is a pretty strong headwind too! Very cool that you were also make into a Fibonacci. k.

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  16. humbirdAugust 25, 2013 at 5:43 PM

    We always chasing something or someone...never satisfied....humans :)

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  17. SusanAugust 25, 2013 at 8:49 PM

    Reminds me of the sad sage and the happy fool, but its possible that the philosopher got that the younger the wiser as opposed to being learn-ed. I often think of those days when I let myself be led to the party, but took my own bike to ride there in the wind.

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  18. Susie ClevengerAugust 26, 2013 at 12:15 AM

    Love it! We seem to always be in the chase

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  19. Kathy ReedAugust 26, 2013 at 12:59 AM

    Am learning a new form today and I love the play here which perfectly explains what is happening in this whimsical painting and I like that you mentioned the lion's pointy hat!

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  20. UnknownAugust 26, 2013 at 12:52 PM

    This is beautiful, evocative, and speaks volumes about a life lived together. It was so wonderful to see you at Chromapoesy, I always value and appreciate your feedback. I have missed you.

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  21. Mystic_MomAugust 27, 2013 at 2:02 PM

    Feeling fate on your faces - what a line! So good, the whole poem reads so well!

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