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Monday, October 18, 2010

FOXTROT

     
      Sailing on a caravan of dreams she moves
      Slick as silken notes and satin seams, and leans
      Into muffled muted notes that box her dreams
      Of furs and pearls and steamy nights.
      His steps designed as accents bright
      Seem stolen from the mirrored light,
      Exposing looks that bounce, reflect and glance
      Off languid partners as they dance.

      Turns and twists and passing rolls
      Indiscretions now unfold in movements
      Both elegant and controlled.
      The mixing scents of flowers and rare spice
      Jazzy secrets unwrapped in indigo and teal
      Transform the dance in form and feel,
      Until it seems they glide
      Upon a measured turning wheel—

      Where dreams are spun into a moment real.
     
      © Gay Reiser Cannon All Rights Reserved



44 comments:

  1. Oh my...she moves on that dream-caravan, which become momentarily real. You are certainly a romantic--possibly a dancer--to know those feelings she is experiencing.

    What a fine poet you are, Gay!

    And I love these words:
    "...Turns and twists and passing rolls
    Indiscretions now unfold in movements
    Both elegant and controlled.

    You are good painting with language, girl!

    PEACE!
    Steve E

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  2. exquisitely stunning poetry !!! loved it :)

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  3. This reads beautifully, each line effortlessly flowing into the next. Nice alliteration and rhyme.

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  4. beautiful poem, so graceful
    Libby x

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  5. And that is how words dance.
    Excellent.

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  6. This is a beautiful read! Lovely picture you paint with words.

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  7. very nice...your words danced for me and invited me in...so fluid....very nice one shot!

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  8. Flows like the dance
    On Dancing With The Stars
    I could only dream
    Such moments could be ours

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  9. Great dance poem & images. :)

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  10. What a perfect way to spin an ending! Lovely lines. "Indiscretions now unfold in movements / Both elegant and controlled," fine movement to your words. cheers

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  11. So very beautiful a dance. I believe this danced straight into my heart!! :) Excellent, so flowing...wonderful! :) April

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  12. your words twist and turn in elegance and a bit of sexy turns of the fox trot

    what a dance
    A "saucy" One Shot

    Thanks from the Moon

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  13. Thank you everyone. As you may know I'm a figure skating judge and have watched hours and hours of dance on ice. Sometimes a couple does such an amazing poetic job that it moves you to words. This was my attempt to match such a performance in words. Glad you felt the dance. Nothing's sexier than a well danced foxtrot. My gratitude to you for coming by to read. My great respect to all of you for your work as well.

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  14. I love the first stanza (Really) - it almost stands on it own -- love the flow of its words, the "muffled, muted notes that box her dreams" very nice rhythm as the dance...bkm

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  15. wonderfully worded as always... a pleasure to read

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  16. Very beautiful and graciously done.. thanks for sharing...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/

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  17. Stunning images here, Gay. I like this poem very much.

    I'm reminded of a play I saw years ago, Grand Hotel, I think. As the play progressed, off to the side of the action were two tango dancers dipping and swaying, looking very much like your photo above.

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  18. now i know why you left that message about a kid that got a double axel....this was amazing writing my friend..you led me to the dancefloor and showed me how to dance..excellent stuff from a great poet..cheers pete

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  19. Your comments mean a great deal to me everyone. I have been going through a little slump in confidence lately; I will try to use your words of encouragement to climb out of that sense of insecurity. Thank you.

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  20. Wonderful One Shot. Love and Light, Sender

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  21. a dance can be so much more than just a dance..your words were "flowing" me into a dance of emotions, pictures and atmosphere..thanks

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  22. This one has an interesting rhythm, like the music to the dance it describe. Nice One Shot, Gay!


    P.S. - Love your new header photo!

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  23. beautiful poem...very descriptive in how you use dance as metaphor for emotions, real life burning underneath our apperances, actions.
    "Into muffled muted notes that box her dreams" powerful line...
    and then the ending: "Where dreams are spun into a moment real." Perfect. great one shot

    George

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  24. I love the smooth flow of your words.

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  25. His steps designed as accents bright
    Seem stolen from the mirrored light,

    love this.

    gorgeous poetry.

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  26. graceful, alovely dance of words.

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  27. what a smooth read! Wonderully crafted images flow from beginning to end... I love the lines

    "Turns and twists and passing rolls
    Indiscretions now unfold in movements"

    great write!

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  28. Your words dance so well together. Delightful, Gay.

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  29. the reader dips and sways with your words. a graceful journey

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  30. Fantastic feeling of rhythm in this. You can sense the dancers with the flowing words and internal rhymes. Wow!

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  31. Thanks to you all for coming by. I'm glad you found the foxtrot a worthy read. I am honored to have the comments from so many talented writers.
    Gay

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  32. I felt like I was waltzing with your words, here. Stunning. And the last line delivers, "Where dreams are spun into a moment real."

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  33. Again thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I so much respect your opinions. All of you had work up today that was so amazing and well written. I am so happy to know all of you and get the benefit of your work and your viewpoints.
    Thanks for coming by. Stop anytime.

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  34. The name foxtrott doesn't suit the way you have described this dance. You have a way of renaming a trott. May I have this dance m'lady?

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  35. oops...the extra 'T' in trot was for emphasis

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  36. I've always wanted to learn the Argentine Tango! This piece has more of the Tango feel than a foxtrot,to me. It's a great piece. I saw that you commented about feeling in a slump. I know that feeling. I hope you keep at it!

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  37. Thanks you guys. You can dance to what ever tune you hear as long as you dance ;)

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  38. Wish I could dance like that but I have two left feet. Nice OS.

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