Sailing on a caravan of dreams
she moves
Slick as silken notes and satin
seams, and leans
Into muffled muted notes that box
her dreams
Of furs and pearls and steamy
nights.
His steps designed as accents
bright
Seem stolen from the mirrored
light,
Exposing looks that bounce,
reflect and glance
Off languid partners as they
dance.
Turns and twists and passing
rolls
Indiscretions now unfold in
movements
Both elegant and controlled.
The mixing scents of flowers and
rare spice
Jazzy secrets unwrapped in indigo
and teal
Transform the dance in form and
feel,
Until it seems they glide
Upon a measured turning wheel—
Where dreams are spun into a
moment real.
© Gay Reiser Cannon All Rights Reserved
Oh my...she moves on that dream-caravan, which become momentarily real. You are certainly a romantic--possibly a dancer--to know those feelings she is experiencing.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fine poet you are, Gay!
And I love these words:
"...Turns and twists and passing rolls
Indiscretions now unfold in movements
Both elegant and controlled.
You are good painting with language, girl!
PEACE!
Steve E
exquisitely stunning poetry !!! loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThis reads beautifully, each line effortlessly flowing into the next. Nice alliteration and rhyme.
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem, so graceful
ReplyDeleteLibby x
Beautiful...
ReplyDeleteAnd that is how words dance.
ReplyDeleteExcellent.
This is a beautiful read! Lovely picture you paint with words.
ReplyDeletevery nice...your words danced for me and invited me in...so fluid....very nice one shot!
ReplyDeleteFlows like the dance
ReplyDeleteOn Dancing With The Stars
I could only dream
Such moments could be ours
Great dance poem & images. :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a perfect way to spin an ending! Lovely lines. "Indiscretions now unfold in movements / Both elegant and controlled," fine movement to your words. cheers
ReplyDeleteSo very beautiful a dance. I believe this danced straight into my heart!! :) Excellent, so flowing...wonderful! :) April
ReplyDeleteyour words twist and turn in elegance and a bit of sexy turns of the fox trot
ReplyDeletewhat a dance
A "saucy" One Shot
Thanks from the Moon
Thank you everyone. As you may know I'm a figure skating judge and have watched hours and hours of dance on ice. Sometimes a couple does such an amazing poetic job that it moves you to words. This was my attempt to match such a performance in words. Glad you felt the dance. Nothing's sexier than a well danced foxtrot. My gratitude to you for coming by to read. My great respect to all of you for your work as well.
ReplyDeleteThe Dance of Love.....
ReplyDeletewell done
ReplyDeleteI love the first stanza (Really) - it almost stands on it own -- love the flow of its words, the "muffled, muted notes that box her dreams" very nice rhythm as the dance...bkm
ReplyDeletewonderfully worded as always... a pleasure to read
ReplyDeleteGorgeous and graceful!
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and graciously done.. thanks for sharing...
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Stunning images here, Gay. I like this poem very much.
ReplyDeleteI'm reminded of a play I saw years ago, Grand Hotel, I think. As the play progressed, off to the side of the action were two tango dancers dipping and swaying, looking very much like your photo above.
now i know why you left that message about a kid that got a double axel....this was amazing writing my friend..you led me to the dancefloor and showed me how to dance..excellent stuff from a great poet..cheers pete
ReplyDeleteYour comments mean a great deal to me everyone. I have been going through a little slump in confidence lately; I will try to use your words of encouragement to climb out of that sense of insecurity. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteWonderful One Shot. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeletea dance can be so much more than just a dance..your words were "flowing" me into a dance of emotions, pictures and atmosphere..thanks
ReplyDeleteThis one has an interesting rhythm, like the music to the dance it describe. Nice One Shot, Gay!
ReplyDeleteP.S. - Love your new header photo!
beautiful poem...very descriptive in how you use dance as metaphor for emotions, real life burning underneath our apperances, actions.
ReplyDelete"Into muffled muted notes that box her dreams" powerful line...
and then the ending: "Where dreams are spun into a moment real." Perfect. great one shot
George
I love the smooth flow of your words.
ReplyDeleteHis steps designed as accents bright
ReplyDeleteSeem stolen from the mirrored light,
love this.
gorgeous poetry.
graceful, alovely dance of words.
ReplyDeletewhat a smooth read! Wonderully crafted images flow from beginning to end... I love the lines
ReplyDelete"Turns and twists and passing rolls
Indiscretions now unfold in movements"
great write!
Your words dance so well together. Delightful, Gay.
ReplyDeletethe reader dips and sways with your words. a graceful journey
ReplyDeleteFantastic feeling of rhythm in this. You can sense the dancers with the flowing words and internal rhymes. Wow!
ReplyDeleteThanks to you all for coming by. I'm glad you found the foxtrot a worthy read. I am honored to have the comments from so many talented writers.
ReplyDeleteGay
I felt like I was waltzing with your words, here. Stunning. And the last line delivers, "Where dreams are spun into a moment real."
ReplyDeleteAgain thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I so much respect your opinions. All of you had work up today that was so amazing and well written. I am so happy to know all of you and get the benefit of your work and your viewpoints.
ReplyDeleteThanks for coming by. Stop anytime.
The name foxtrott doesn't suit the way you have described this dance. You have a way of renaming a trott. May I have this dance m'lady?
ReplyDeleteoops...the extra 'T' in trot was for emphasis
ReplyDeleteI've always wanted to learn the Argentine Tango! This piece has more of the Tango feel than a foxtrot,to me. It's a great piece. I saw that you commented about feeling in a slump. I know that feeling. I hope you keep at it!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks you guys. You can dance to what ever tune you hear as long as you dance ;)
ReplyDeleteWish I could dance like that but I have two left feet. Nice OS.
ReplyDeleteAnother beautiful piece. Graceful.
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